Advising Meeting 5.16

Goals
1. Examing intro and conclusion
2. Look at thesis in connection to conclusion
3. Look at sentence structure and punctuation

Accomplished
1. Discussed new elements to put in conclusion as well as the word choices that need to be thought about in concluding paragraphs
2. Reordered 2 conclusion paragraphs and extracted several "big" ideas that need elaboration
3. Broke up sentences in intro paragraph
4. Discuss conversationality - decided where appropriate

Next Meeting
Examine re-done conclusion, look at any holes after Dr. Valenza has read through revised copy.